BrolfThePaladin's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[-KillerBack-]

I am very sorry.
But after the first 3 seconds I couldn't listen to that anymore.

I'm not calling you bad. I just can't listen to that.

I am very sorry.
0/5 Stars

Enzo07 responds:

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[Get On! (REUPLOADED)]

1:48 make it louder, make the people bumb their heads, just do it way louder than before and you got a perfect song.

I also think that would be one tune, that I'd play on my radio mate.

4.5/5 Stars
Keep it goin'! You're frickin' good!

[Rebirth]

Magnifique!

Bonne musique.

Okay, leave that alone, my french is horrible but let's say it so - you did your work great and I want to hear more okay? Please do more mate, It was such a good, dreamy song and I really love to dream.

5/5 Stars
Carry on mate, carry on!

MysteriousPresence responds:

Hey that's a great French ! X)
Thanks for the review, I'm deeply touched !
The dreamy aspect of the music is something I worked for, so I'm glad you noticed it ! =)
Don't worry, I think I keep improving, thanks again for this positive review ! :3

[Get Up!]

Music Theory...learn it..
https://www.musictheory.net/

No Rating
Nope. First learn music theory, then come back. Then try again. I won't review that. It's better.

[The Forest Of The Mind]

I'm flashed.
Sry, but I'm flashed.

You will get in my video where I play Dark Souls 3.this just warms me cockles!

AWESOME!!!/5 Stars
You're toasted oficially as a legend by this day for me. Make more of this and you may come to thy great hall of warriors which arr the best of the best of the...

Srsly you would be the 2nd dude I'd follow on every song he make. So PLEASE DO MORE OF THAT *_*

95TurboSol responds:

Hey thanks so much! More tracks getting ready to be uploaded :)

[Trial N Error - Attempt 6]

It is awesome.
Mate you did a well job you did some so original, so unconventional, yet so pleasing track that I put you in my unique lights list. It's just because it's a tune that just totally bombs my words away.

Brolf/5 Stars
I just can't criticize that cos I think you created a new kind of music genre. Great work mate.

[Bird's Song After The Storm]

Harmonic, great buld of the song and the whole arrangement is just perfect.
I don't have much to say on this. Well except

Brolf/5 Stars
Welcome to the awesome list, Bro!

nerevars responds:

Well except?

Anyway, thanks for listening! :D

[Single Awareness Special]

Original. Creative. The text and the length are just things I need to criticize.
First of all. You did a great job making that tune. I don't see very often tunes with actualy voices in it nor text.

But as I am also not just an audiophile, but an author, I'll take your text apart, look at every very little tiny detail so hold your seatbelts. Could be a long journy, I dunno I just write now.

"I'm tired of the arguments
Tired of the fights
tired of the shit I never got right"

This is a well start. Cos you make ppl suspicious "You're tired of what arguments? What fights?" but you also can lead some ppl in the wrong way with the "tired of the shit I never got right" you know, ppl could think "Ah, that fella means procrastination" but you're rappin' about something else. Could be a bit misleading, also the way you made the rhymes is ok. It could be better cos it doesnt sound like
A
AB
B

More like
A
A
B

"He take better care of her
He does it all
but I ain't waitin for her phone calls"

Now we're talking. The pals out there may know what you are rapping about. Still the rhymes are just like in the first one but the content is good. Still I don't have a clue how you come from HIM to HER in just one phrase. It's a bit confusing.

"I'm so done with shit
I've heard it all
Bitches in my past had me climbing walls"

Still this god damn rhyme scheme. It's so confusing mate. Well, just fyi, if you keep the listener way too long in the unknown dark, they may not now what you try to say to them. Music like this is for carrying a message. You want that message to been read and understood. Right? So don't mislead ppl and just come to the point after 3-4 big phrases. The very best thing you can do is pull out the lyrics from a good rapper (NOT KHALIFA) and analyse it. Look at yours and them and look what you can make better.

"And half of them
I'll half miss
But I'll remember every last kiss"

Sounds good. I still don't like the rhyme schema.

"I'm not looking back
I'm thinkin on it
If I don't move forward
Back in the corner"

A
A
B
B

Now you have a good schema. Start with easy ones. So at this part most ppl actually also got what you mean. This thing way further up in the beginning and the message would be clearer as water.

"Can I give love
or will I give loss
If I love again
What is the cost"

I can actually not criticize that one cos that one is perfect. Let's move to the next.

"If I punched the window
Straight to your heart
And it cut my thumb
And it left a scar"

Well that one is totally way away from any box I saw.
"If I punched the window..."
"...and it left a scar..."
Maybe artistic but so confusing I couldn't find any words to it.
You use "IF" in a phrase and put the past in a sentence at the end. That's just wrong.
Don't do that. That is not how english teacher teach english. Or at least how the english language works. Better would be there "...and it leave a scar..." because IF something HAPPENS, then you talk in the PRESENT. Not in the past. Just remember that. Songwriting may not be easy but no one said that it is :)

"would you remember
the stitches I got
fought for your sake
when the world forgot"

It is a nice question but not the melody in that sentence is somehow destroyed in the way where you put "Would you remember" at the beginning. It may sound better as last sentence in that phrase but I didn't tested it yet. Just sounds unmelodic to me. Otherwise that phrase is good.

"that opposites
sometimes attract
and sometimes those opposites
just don't react"

In your song you lead the listener to think out of the box. Perfect. That phrase....dude.
A
B
A
B
Good but when A is the same word it's not. Making rhymes sometimes is hard, aye. But you should know that a RHYME and THE SAME WORD are two different things. Opposites rhymes on opposites. That's a joke under authors because, well it shows the ppl you didn't took much afford in the text which is kinda sad and I think also not true.

"never did nothing
but hold you close
and wish my thoughts
had an impact"

Well maybe it's because you never did nothing that you are at the point where you stand right now...Oh and the phrase? It's okay, I don'T see any rhymes but otherwise it's okay.

"That's just one of my little hurts
the rest loud sounds harsh words
before I used to spit verse
before the first time I hit first"

And now we got an almost perfect again. Just could use some more melody but that melody I'm talking comes with experience so work on!

"now my life's an inverse
no sticks, stones, or words hurt
Cause I feel nothing, unrehearsed
Almost wish I could reverse
The damage"

It just feels like the things you want to say us are not all in that lyrics. The end just is like not the end but a pause. Where you could put a guitar solo or whatever in it. 'Ye know also your lyrics don't have a refrain which is not needed in every song just made me think if you just sat down and wrote what you thougt.
Cos if, write more. Write until you think it's finally done. Actually it feels like you're not. I don't actually know but the text could use more content.

Also, somehow the overall voice track sound whater not YOUR Voice but the overall sound of it is a bit...you know, it's not pleasin' to me.

After all I must say you did a great job, it's a creative and original track but it could use some reworks so carry on! Keep the work goin'! I love creative and original tunes :)

3.5/5 Stars
Great job. Keep goin'. You're good.

ADR3-N responds:

Thanks for the in depth review for something I half-assed with a shitty mic and a lot of angry feelings. I chose the odd rhyme scheme I did mostly because AABB and ABAB get really old after hearing it all day long, and I wanted something closer to how I would actually speak to someone in person. Maybe I went full on artsy, haha. Anyway, appreciate the review. Wish there were more like it on NG!

[Neo-Bushido]

Heavy
and
Metal
and
Heavy
and
Metal
and
AWESOME!
\m/ / 5 Stars

DanJohansen responds:

Awesome
and
Cool
and
Awesome
and
Cool
Review man!
\m/

[The Woods of Arianis]

Needless to say.

Brolf/5 Stars
Awesome.

DanJohansen responds:

Thx Paladin man! Glad you enjoyed it! :D