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Uuuh another epic song :3

The beginning is perfect. Like it should be. Epic.
Always keep in mind that epicness comes from perfection.

The drums are in this one better. The last note in the part from 1:00 to 1:30 may be better in moll. Try it, it may sound better. Or at least, it sounded to me like dur.

The rest of the song sounded like you head an intro from ManOwaR the whole time in the head and experimented with the variants you could do. At 2:50 it gets pretty nice. I feel how you get better at this stuff.

It felt like you have no idea how to build an epic song or at least the feeling but not the structure idea. I'll help you out -> http://www.dummies.com/how-to/content/classical-music-the-movements-of-a-symphony.html
No, I don't think you're a dummy, but this'll help you out, getting structure in epic songs. As, in fact, almost 99% of the epic songs that exists are built after the structure of a symphony. ACTUALLY epic songs are nothing else as symphonys just in modern style with old and new instruments.

Example: Vedrim - Get Hype (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NhnFUIBigv4) A hell of an epic song. If you listen closesly, you'll get what I mean. It's actually a symphony, an orchestra. But a modern one. And - it's epic ;)

This should be your goal. Give people goosebumbs with music. They should be amazed.

3.5/5 Stars
May the force be with you.

MysteriousPresence responds:

Thanks for the review !
"The drums are in this one better. The last note in the part from 1:00 to 1:30 may be better in moll" : I'm afraid I didn't understand anything ! X)

In fact I structured this song this way :
- 0:00-0:52 : the men (and our protagonist) are leaving their villages or towns in order to prepare to war, not necessarily in good moods if you see what I mean.
- 0:52-1:12 : the army is walking.
- 1:12-1:28 : the army is still walking, but they can see the enemies far away.
- 1:28-2:34 : fight ! :3
- 2:34-2:38 : the leader of the protagonist's army gets killed (stabbed in the front).
- 2:38-2:55 : the protagonist watches around him the devastation.
- 2:55-3:27 : he draws his sword and kills many enemies.
- 3:27-3:47 : he finally gets stabbed and stabbed again and again in turn.
- 3:47-4:04 : the protagonist is in transe.
- 4:04-4:38 : his sight stabilizes. He's in pain. His head hurts a lot (the painful vibrations from 4:21 to 4:38 are intended).
- 4:38-5:11 : he surpasses his pain and manages to fight a bit longer. Thanks to him, his army finally wins.
- 5:11-5:22 : he collapses. He's dead.
- 5:21-5:29 : we see all the corpses of the protagonist's army and of the enemy army. No one cares the protagonist died in hero : they're all gone.

I'm so gonna put this in the Author Comments... :3
Honestly I don't want to follow a classic structure for my songs, I really want to listen to my heart when I compose music. For example, Ectisity really liked Rebirth (http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/672994) because he could feel I did this song as I wanted to. And you in fact liked it a lot too ! =D
Thanks again for the review ! Oh and by the way, I really didn't like GET HYPE! : I couldn't feel any emotions ! X)

Well, I think my job is done here. You're on the right road, your last 3 tracks were as good as a track should be.

5/5 Stars
Keep the work going like this, I think you'll make it.

demon1000 responds:

Thanks Man I will keep going no matter what!

You should work on more tracks like this for getting a feeling for volumes. Stuff is too loud, too quiet, you can't understand the voice really fully and all in all you should work extremely on your start. I tell everyone the same, I'm not a fan of electronic music but with experience you get the feeling for volumes. As Deft said, the kick was too loud. For me the first note was too loud but okay, that's my opinion.

From technical sights I got the feeling you used one and the same thing the whole time. I mean I hear lots of electronic music since I'm active as Reviewer on NG and all the good ones had something special. And with that I mean something like a catchy hook/melody or the good implementation of an unusual instrument or noise. This here sounds like something from the store. Something you get everywhere. You want to make your song special, don't you? Also it's a portal tribute. It just sounds unspecial. And not in a good way so it's special again, it's just unspecial. Tip from me - give something in the song, that's remarkable. And the portal voice, repeating stuff is nothing special. Random words are totally normal in electronic songs. Also, when it's a tribute.

You had to work a few weeks for that song, which is intermediate level. Work longer on your songs. Trust me. If you think your song is ready, it's not. It's only ready, when you party hard to it. Trust me. I'm doing internet content for 5 years now, your own stuff is only then really good if you look pretty critical on your work and reached the same reaction on YOURSELF as you want to the listeners.

3/5 Stars
May the force be with you

WarriorTrone responds:

Well that was unexpected hmm. Well this song is like a Bigroom Remake but a bit remixy. And I didn't really use the same thing, I changed the preset and a few drums a couple times... I can't really create and good "CATCHY" melodies because I got no piano for this program I use. And nope I really do not care if the song is special or not. I made it for fun, and for some listeners really.

I struggled to get the portal voices because most of the ones I got doesn't work for FL. Also I don't really wanna work longer on my songs. This remix should of taken about nearly a week but I had a few breaks. This is ready by the way. But I might remake my remix.

My reaction to this when I listen to it was surprised really. Because I never made anything like this. I don't need to party hard on this.

Was hoping for at least 4 stars... but meh, I gotta be grateful. Also not to be rude, but I don't trust a lot of people here... Anyway thanks for the review, it didn't really help me a lot. But thanks anyway.

It's chilling. Badummts. No really, I like it.
Have nothing to say to this except

5/5 Stars
Keep going! You're good :)

Nothing to say.

Means nothing bad.

So what you can do to improve?

Do more tracks and add some Tags.

5/5 Stars
THIS IS SPARTAAAAAAAAcolus.

RomanM responds:

Thanks for the review!
(I couldn't think of any tags)

I'm very pleased of this musical artwork. I really have to humbly say, this loop is jolly to listen to.

Brolf/5 Stars
Welcome to the list o' nice gentleman, old chap :)

sebastien01 responds:

Thank you very much for the good words sir! :)

Uuuh! An epic song! I love the epic genre. Now this review may take a bit longer.

The beginning was...well it was like you just played the piano pretty randomly.
After that, the drums are WAY too early on their rows. Let the music flow and THEN you let the drums go. Imagine the drums are wild dogs. You don't let wild dogs free while kids are playing on the grass, do you?
The part before 1:00 and a bit after is for an epic song awkward. As said, don't mix the dogs with kids. Use other drums or put them out.

Your piano play after that is pretty okay, the only thing is, it doesn't come authentic enough with the brasses or horns. Couldn't hear it really. THEY ARE TOO WEAK. Imagine the horns/brasses like a giant screaming. Or a mountainhorn. Both are neither quiet, nor soft. They are LOUD. And MIGHTY. You know? The hearer should feel the POWER in an epic song.

The lighter drum is totally wrong. Put it away and use another one. It felt like the drummer was in the wrong opera. 2:30 it is totally okay when you use a drumkit in an epic song. But in an epic song with a piano, which got a pretty soft spirit....never use a drumkit then.

The end is too fast. You use a piano the whole time. So your epic song is more like an epic ballad. Ballads CAN be fast. But not in the epic genre.

So you want to make REAL epic music, don't you? Well than you have many things to learn.
I give you a good example for an epic song with a piano in it. Also, the band is a "trve metal" band, it's actually epic metal BUT the example is just normal epic. For you to learn, listen closeley. I think there's an english version out there. But here it is (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Sy0oj1MyeUE)

Stay in the rythm. As said, the end was too fast. First you was 4/4 than you were going something else but not 4/4.

1.5/5 Stars
Heads up! Keep it going! To learn means to fall. And to learn means to get up after that :)

Though, it looks like also on normal ears your piece comes pretty good. So look it like that. You got potential. More than many others. So go on!

MysteriousPresence responds:

Wow thanks for that detailed review ! 0o
Well in fact, the piano plays the main melodies of the song, but this part is pretty ugly !
Thanks for the wild dogs explanation, I'll remember that ! X)
I'll try to work on my horns' power, thanks for the advice !
Got it for the lighter drums, I definitely got a problem with drums ! :3
Honestly I don't think fastness in epic piano pieces are forbidden ! All depends on the way the composer makes it ! :p
Thanks again for this detailed review, I'll try to fix all those problems ! =)

Okay, I'll tell you what to do, how to make this song better.
Make more songs.

Now srsly, you got it. You know how to make a decent tune. Or have it in your veins at least. The only thing you need is experience.

So, needless to say.
4.5/5 Stars
Keep it going bro, you go it!

The intro is too quiet. Otherwise it's well made. Only problem - no remarkable hook. Well at least if there's one, it doesn't get through. 2:30 is a part where I hear it pretty quietly. Just make sure people get the hook and keep it. Because this is what makes a song special.

4/5 Stars
Great work! Keep it going!

Demonic-Overmind responds:

Once again, I know the intro is way too lame, i could've made something different and better, but I don't feel like working on this song. Maybe I'll revisit this sometime later, my next song will definitely have a better intro.
I also consider the hook to be weak throughout the song, will try something better next time.

Thanks for the review.

Nice. Really good track.
But this is obviously not 8-bit. It's chiptune mixed with real instruments ;)

4.5/5 Stars
Your work is fascinating, keep it going! :)

8-bitheroes responds:

True, but new grounds doesn't have that genre in the list :p
Thanks for your feedback!

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